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Rules for Writing: Naughty or Nice

  • Posted on June 18, 2017 at 12:20 pm

By Amanda Lynn

I will profess that I am by no means an expert on the do’s and don’ts of writing fiction, whether erotic or otherwise. Most of what I know about producing a written document comes from 33 years as an administrative clerk in the Canadian Forces. My desire to write fiction dates back to my grade 8 and 9 English classes where creative writing was a large part of the curriculum. Of course, the stories I wrote then were all very PG. I dabbled with writing until I graduated high school, and then life got in the way and writing took a back seat.

Now that I’m retired, I finally decided to pick up the pen once again thanks to an author who goes by the name ‘No One’. I’d read some stories by this author over at Nifty, and was introduced to Juicy Secrets when a story of his was posted here. By then we’d exchanged a few emails, and he was urging me to try writing again. With that encouragement, and finding a sub-genre that I really enjoyed at JS, I took the plunge.

I pumped out my first effort, “The Holly and the Ivy,” within a week or so and submitted it. To my surprise, Cheryl, Naughty Mommy, and JetBoy approved it, and with only minor editing the story was published. Still, when I read each chapter as it was released, I was not entirely happy with what I had written. I thought I could do better, and decided I needed to learn more about the art of writing.

Thus I began my research, some of which I’m going to share with you here. The amount of information available on the web is astounding, to say the least. Much of what I will reference comes from blogs and web pages of published authors of erotica.

Are you ready? Let’s get started…


Unless you are still in grade school and reading this (which you probably shouldn’t be because you’re a bit too young to be on this site), you may already have a pretty good grasp of spelling and grammar. Still, the English language is full of rules, some of which apply only some of the time and can even contradict other rules.

When I traveled on the school bus way back when, we would stop at the entrance to a subdivision. Someone had posted a sign at the side of the road that simply read:

SLOW
CHILDREN
PLAYING

No punctuation. So, was this sign a warning not to drive fast because there were children playing? Or a statement that the children playing were mentally challenged?

Remember, everyone, punctuation saves lives! { Let’s eat kids! } or { Let’s eat, kids! } Of course, if those kids are horny young girls, then I suppose either one would be okay. But I think you know what I’m getting at.

Listed below are two very informative books that were suggested to me by JetBoy when I asked for advice at the beginning of my research. Both books can be found at your friendly neighborhood bookstore or your local public library.

Woe is I: The Grammarphobe’s Guide to Better English in Plain English

Eats, Shoots & Leaves: The Zero Tolerance Approach to Punctuation

A dictionary and a thesaurus are also super handy to have around. Most word processing programs have both of these features built into them. These work well, but are limited. I purchased a program called Grammarly (a freeware version is available) to augment Microsoft Word that offers a more in-depth grammar, punctuation, and spelling checker. And, of course, there’s always Google. I’m sure if I’d had access to this tech back in high school my assignments would have had much less red ink on them.

Another good read, one that was recommended to me by Naughty Mommy, is Stephen King’s On Writing: A Memoir of the Craft. The first half of the book is autobiographical and interesting. The rest deals with the mechanics of writing. I especially enjoyed when Mr. King described the writer’s toolbox, comparing tools we need to write well with a craftsman’s toolbox.

Shall we take a look inside Mr. King’s toolbox? I’m sure he won’t mind.

On the top level we find a couple of common but very important tools, vocabulary and grammar.

Your vocabulary starts developing when you are a small child. ‘Mama’ and ‘Dada’ are typical first words for most people. Mine was ‘shoe’, and I am sure this thrilled my parents to no end. So, vocabulary is your most common tool, and it will evolve as you continue to read. I have found that just listening to people talk also helps, be it at the supermarket, in a restaurant, or at the airport. Listen to the slang or jargon they use.

Some Do’s and Don’ts from Stephen King

  • DO NOT make a conscious effort to improve your vocabulary
  • DO NOT attempt to dress up your vocabulary
  • DO use a simple word in place of a complex, obscure one
  • DO use the first word that comes to mind

Next, a few words about grammar. For a sentence to be complete, it must contain a verb and a noun. Everyone knows that, right? But here’s something else. Verbs can be either active or passive. With an active verb, the subject of the sentence is doing something.

Example: Marcy licked Lisa’s pussy.

Whereas with a passive verb, the action is being done to the subject.

Example: Lisa’s pussy was licked by Marcy.

The use of passive verbs should be avoided if at all possible.

Now let’s talk about the poor adverb. Stephen King has said “The road to hell is paved with adverbs.” I understand the establishment’s negative view of the adverb, and I respect their opinion. However, I like adverbs and will continue to use them, sparingly, but still I will use them. I believe they do have something to contribute to a story.

What are adverbs, then…?

Adverbs — words that modify verbs, adjectives, or other adverbs, and usually end in ‘ly’ — are considered by most professional writers to be a sign of lazy prose. With a strong and appropriate verb, you will not need an adverb.

Adverbs are often used along with dialogue tags to show how something was said. With good descriptive dialogue, an adverb isn’t necessary. By using the adverb, this is also considered a form of ‘telling.’ We will discuss ‘telling’ and ‘showing’ a bit later.

Okay, digging down to the second level of our toolbox, we find what Stephen King calls the Elements of Style.

Paragraphs:

The paragraph is the next level of organization after the sentence. The structure consists of a topic sentence followed by support and description. They provide dialogue, description, and direction.

Description:

Draws the reader into the story by using the senses, and begins the visualization of the subject of the description. The description should be neither too thin, nor overwhelming. Include all the senses and do not spend too much time describing a character.

Dialogue:

Gives the characters their voice and helps define them. You can show things about the character through dialogue without explicitly saying it. Be true to the character by keeping the dialogue appropriate for that person. For example, 8-year-old Sally probably won’t use words like ‘prognosis,’ or ‘philanthropist.’ Come to think of it, I don’t use words like philanthropist. Don’t be afraid to use swear words, if it is appropriate for your character or the situation they are in.

Theme:

The theme is a recurring message presented in the story. It can be expressed through characters, symbols, and the story itself.


 

So, those are the basics. But now I want to share with you a few of the somewhat more advanced things I’ve learned about during my research.

1. Point of View: Who sees what

Point of View (POV) informs the reader who is telling us the story, or the scene. Are we outside the story and it is being narrated to us by a storyteller? Or are we seeing things through the eyes of one or more characters?

Some variations…

OMNISCIENT POV: Told by a narrator who is not a character. Can look into the minds of any character, even during the same scene. Can see the past and the future and can tell us things the characters know nothing about.

THIRD PERSON, ONE POV: The story is told by one person and is therefore limited as to what information you can include. If the POV character is not present at a scene, you can’t describe it, unless through dialogue with another character. The POV character can only experience things she/he can see, smell, taste, hear, feel, know. For example, if the POV character is embarrassed, you could write ‘She felt the heat rise in her face,’ but you couldn’t say ‘Her face turned bright red,’ because the narrator/writer inhabits the character and is working from inside.

FIRST PERSON POV: Very similar to Third Person, One POV but more intimate. Everything that is written must be done through the perception of the POV character. This is by far the most limiting of the POV types.

THIRD PERSON, MULTIPLE POVs: The story is told by multiple characters, but only one at a time. The POV character can be switched at the beginning of a new scene.

HEAD HOPPING: With Third Person, Multiple POVs, changing the POV character must only be done at the beginning of a new scene. Changing within a scene is called Head Hopping and can become very confusing to the reader.

2. Dialogue Tags: Who says what

Dialogue Tags are the one- or two-word statements after a piece of dialogue that tell the reader who is speaking. The most common is ‘said’. ‘Asked’ and sometimes ‘answered’ are also acceptable. Anything else can draw attention to itself and, in fact, is telling the reader how the dialogue is spoken rather than showing them (as discussed in #4 below).

It’s important to remember proper punctuation. The dialogue tag is part of the sentence of dialogue, so a comma is inserted between the end of the dialogue and the tag. For example: “Your panties are wet,” she said. Of course, you would use a question mark in place of the comma if the sentence of dialogue is a question.

Facial expression or actions should not be used in as a dialogue tag. One cannot smile a line of dialogue.

Incorrect: “Welcome home,” she smiled.

Correct: “Welcome home.” She smiled.

Avoid using adverbs in tags. This is another form of telling. Instead, let the dialogue do all the work, or use body language.

Incorrect: “What is wrong with you?” she asked angrily.

Correct: “What the hell is wrong with you?” she asked.

Dialogue tags should be inserted as soon as possible if there is a long stretch of dialogue to be spoken. Don’t make the reader wait to find out who is talking.

Action tags can also identify who is speaking. Unlike dialogue tags, they can provide more information such as:

  • Breaking up long passages of dialogue.
  • Creating an image of setting or actions in the readers’ mind.
  • Giving information about the character’s emotions, especially if this contradicts her words. For example: “I’m fine.” Janet rubbed her hand over her swelling ankle.
  • Helping to pace the conversation by creating pauses in the dialogue.

Alternate between dialogue tags, action tags, and untagged dialogue. If it is evident to the reader who is speaking, then we don’t need tags. If more than two characters are talking, then the need for tags will increase. Be creative with your action tags, don’t bore the reader with repetitive actions.

3. Technical Vocabulary: The vagina monologue, or the pussy speaks

It goes without saying that using clinical words during a steamy sex scene would probably kill the mood. I have a reasonable vocabulary when it comes to synonyms for the various parts of the female (and male) anatomy. After all, I’ve spent many years in the company of soldiers.

I did some digging to see what words are most accepted when writing serious erotica — not just porn — and found a blog article by Bryn Donovan that I thought was a good start.

http://www.bryndonovan.com/2015/04/22/synonyms-for-parts-of-the-body/

This next blog article doesn’t talk about body parts so much, but actions, feelings and naughty words in general as it pertains to writing the sexier parts of our genre. This one was written by Quinn Anderson, a published author of heterosexual and homosexual erotica. I’ve used it several times when I found myself stuck for a word that would work in a scene.

 https://www.fanfiction.net/s/9661958/1/The-Ultimate-Guide-to-Writing-Smut-Fic

 4. The Golden Rule

The golden rule of writing fiction is: “Show, don’t tell.” What does this mean?

With telling you are giving the reader your perception and outcome. On the other hand, showing gives the reader enough of the details for them to draw their own opinions and conclusions.

Showing involves the reader in the story and keeps them interested. Telling is best saved for the lecture hall. The best way to ‘show’ the reader is to use the senses. Show them things they can taste, smell, hear, and so on. Use strong verbs and concrete nouns that will create a picture in the reader’s mind. Be specific in your detail.

For example, ‘She slogged to the bedroom’ expresses more to us than ‘She walked to the bedroom.’

Don’t give the reader your opinion of a character: ‘Janice was talented.’ Show Janice in a scene that will let the reader come to that conclusion on their own.

So how do we know if we are ‘telling?’ Here a few indicators you can look for that might suggest telling: 

  • Using adjectives, especially in combination with linking verbs, e.g., she was, looked, felt, appeared, seemed. This is especially true for abstract adjectives, e.g., beautiful, interesting, etc.

TELLING: Carol seemed to be turned on.

SHOWING: Carol crossed her legs, squeezing her thighs together, and licked her lips as she watched the young girl undress.

  • Using adverbs, especially in dialogue tags.

TELLING: “You are such a bitch,” she said angrily.

SHOWING: “You are such a bitch.” She slapped Amber’s face.

  • Using emotion words. Instead of naming emotions, use actions, visceral reactions, and body language to show us how the character is feeling.

TELLING: “I have never kissed a girl before,” April said, feeling embarrassed.

SHOWING: “I have never kissed a girl before.” April lowered her gaze to the floor as she felt the heat rise in her face.

  • Using dialogue tags other than ‘said’ to tell readers how a line of dialogue should be read. Instead, let the dialogue speak for itself.

TELLING: “Fuck me, Sally,” she exclaimed.

SHOWING: “Fuck me, Sally!”

  • Using ‘filters’. You’re telling readers what your character sees, hears, feels, etc., instead of letting readers experience it directly.

TELLING: Rita heard Amy suck in a breath when she touched her nipple.

SHOWING: Amy sucked in a breath as Rita touched her nipple.

There are times, however, when telling can be useful, such as in covering a period of time when nothing of importance happens. At the beginning of Chapter 8 of “A Girl Named Charlie,” for instance, a year has gone by since the end of the previous chapter. I use a couple of paragraphs to briefly inform the reader what went on during the interim.

 

Final Thoughts

There is so much more information out there when it comes to writing fiction, be it erotica or conventional, naughty or nice. I have touched on just a few things things that I feel are the bare minimum a would-be author needs to write an entertaining story well.

Maybe the most important tip is simply to read, read, and read some more.

You may also want to set a daily writing goal for yourself, even if it’s only twenty minutes a day. A fun website I found offers a large assortment of “generators” that can give you a random plot, setting, dialogue, and much more. It will provide you a starting point to scribble out whatever you want for your daily exercise.

 


 

REFERENCES: 

Stephen King’s Toolbox - https://memoirofthecraft.wikispaces.com/The+Writing+Toolbox

Adverbs - http://jenniferellis.ca/overusing-adverbs/

Telling and Showing and POV - http://jae-fiction.com/

 

OTHER ITEMS OF INTEREST:

Creative Writing 101 by Ali Hale

https://www.dailywritingtips.com/creative-writing-101/

All Write – Fiction Advice by AJ Humpage

http://allwritefictionadvice.blogspot.ca/

Fiction Writer’s Mentor by Tracy Culleton

http://www.fiction-writers-mentor.com/

Slippery Tips: Advice for the Would-Be Erotic Author

  • Posted on June 14, 2017 at 6:00 pm

By DirtyMindedMom

Note from JetBoy: Our dear site sister Rachael, who has graciously permitted us to re-post several of her amazing stories (which you can find under her DirtyMindedMom moniker in our Story Archives) recently began postng a new series of incredibly useful suggestions for the novice erotic author. Upon encountering these while paying a visit to Rachael’s site, I immediately wanted them for Juicy Secrets. Cheryl and Naughty Mommy strongly agreed, and that’s when we got the idea of setting up our Writing Advice page, featuring Rachael’s tips and much more. Make all her helpful hints yours, and perhaps one day YOU can turn out a story as spine-meltingly hot as Rachael’s “Family Practice.”

This article is very much a work in progress, and we will be adding more segments from Rachael in the months to come. Thanks by the bushel basket to her for letting us post these here (and for allowing me to “lesbianize” all the sex parts for the benefit of our particular audience). We love you, Rachael!


Porn Writing One Oh-Oh-OH! One

I hear from a lot of people who want to write dirty stories, but don’t think that they can. This is just plain silly. Anyone can write erotic stories – ANYONE! It’s been said that if you can talk, you can write. That’s never been more true than when it comes to writing hot porno stories.

I’ve been toying with the idea of writing a How-To manual for would-be erotic writers for a while now, but it’s something that could end up being a big project and so I’ve put it off. Well, it finally hit me that I don’t have to sit down and do it all in one shot. I remembered that I have this blog thingie and I can simply write it as a series of posts. Duh.

I don’t want to get too technical or fancy about it, but my plan is to offer a collection of quick tips and tricks to help people understand some of the fundamentals of writing in general and the elements you need to consider when you’re writing about naked people doing filthy things with their genitals.

There’s no set plan for this endeavor, so who knows how it will play out. I’m just going to jump in and see where it takes us. I’ve gotten a great deal of pleasure from writing, and, if I can help other people get the same thrill out of it that I have, I’ll be very happy.

Here goes…

Rachael’s Slippery Tip #1: Write About What Turns You On

When you’re starting out, this is critical. Attempting to write a story based on what’s popular, or what you think will turn other people on, is a recipe for disaster. I was obsessed with studying writing when I was in college, and for years after. I read every book about writing that I could get my hands on. I was full of theory, but when I sat down to write, I worried too much about what my readers wanted and ended up not having anything worthwhile to say. It wasn’t until I started writing porn for my own pleasure that I was able to become completely immersed in the process, and finish a story that I was willing to share with the world. The only reason I was able to get there is because I was writing about something that I cared about and that turned me on (and I mean really turned me on!).

If it makes you horny, it will make other people horny. That I can guarantee. If you force yourself to write about something that you’re not into, it will show – especially when you’re just starting out. If your goal is to get people wet and/or hard with your words, don’t waste time chasing after what you think people want. You know your own kinks better than anyone, so write about those. Do what you love, and the orgasms will naturally follow. (I think that’s how the saying goes, right?)

A question I get from wannabe authors is: What should I write about? You already have the answer. Think about what story categories you’re drawn to, or what porn videos do you most often turn to. If you find yourself standing naked out in the middle of a field, what are you going to fantasize about while you masturbate (because if you’re out in a field by yourself naked, you’re obviously going to masturbate!). Once you figure out what turns you on the most, you’re ready to take the next step.

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Rachael’s Slippery Tip #2: Start Small

Writing porn is a shitload of fun! But, if you want to do it well, it can also be a lot of work. One problem I’ve seen many first time writers run into is that they’ve envisioned a sweeping erotic epic with a large cast of horny characters coupling and tripling up in an endless array of combinations — but when it comes to translating their opus into a real story, they peter out a few pages into it. For your first couple of stories it’s important not to bite off more than you can chew (or, more appropriately for our purposes, don’t eat more than you can swallow).

When you’re starting out, think in terms of setting up a simple situation that leads to one good sex scene. Daughter walks in on mom masturbating with a dildo and offers to do it for her. Teenage girl wants to learn how to make out and gets her best friend’s little sister to practice with her. Mom sneaks into daughter’s bedroom to filch the girl’s unwashed panties, but the daughter catches her mother sniffing them and offers to let Mom smell her pussy instead.

Nothing fancy, nothing too complicated, just a straightforward cause-and-effect situation. Keep the main action strictly between two characters. There could be a third character lurking around to add some tension, but the sex scene needs to revolve around just two people (or any combination of two humans, aliens, elves, dogs, and/or vampires). Along the same lines, don’t try to have your amorous couple perform the entire Karma Sutra. Limit yourself to one or two sex acts and focus on really bringing those to life. Mom fingers her daughter. Woman goes down on the little girl next door. Thirtysomething housewife ties up her younger sister and fucks her with a dildo. Don’t try to do too much all at once.

Shoot for three to five pages, but no more than about seven. Pages can vary depending on how much dialogue there is, so it might be helpful to think in terms of word count. Around 3,000 words is a reasonable target for your first few stories. Once you get the feel for the amount of time and effort it takes to write a simple story, you’ll be better equipped to know when to begin expanding your titillating tales to include multiple sex scenes, more characters, and deeper plots.

Start small, score a few quick successes by actually finishing some stories, then build from there.

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Rachael’s Slippery Tip #3: Building to a Great Climax

A good story is like a good one-night stand.

First there’s the attraction, then some foreplay, and it all leads to a fantastic climax (or two, or five). If any of these parts are missing, then it’s just doesn’t work quite as well. It’s the same with a story, whether it’s a three-page quickie or a multi-chapter epic. You don’t need to be a literary expert in story structure, but you do need to understand the minimum requirements if you want to seduce your reader into coming back to your place for the night.

A lot of writing guides explain that stories should have a beginning, middle, and end. I’ve always found this to be a pretty useless way to explain how to shape a story. What’s important is the function of each of these parts. The beginning contains an introduction to your characters, a premise, and a promise. The middle serves to develop the characters, complicate the premise, and build tension. The end is where you deliver the big pay-off, release the tension, and fulfill the promise.

The introduction is the place for setting up everything the reader needs to know. It all starts with an interesting character that compels the reader to want to get to know them better. A mother of two in a sexless marriage who notices her older daughter developing into a desirable young woman. A shy teenage girl who doesn’t know to deal with her blossoming body and wants to explore her sexuality with someone she has trusted all her life. A horny niece who lusts after her aunt, but is crippled with guilt because her aunt and her mom are identical twins. Describing characters in this way easily leads to your basic premise. Mom seduces daughter; teen girl flirts with big sister; niece has sex with aunt as a surrogate for her own mother.

Your premise is the spine of your story. This means that every scene, event, and line of dialogue should somehow serve this main idea. Staying true to your premise will keep you on track while writing, and prevent you from veering off into areas that confuse or distract the reader.

Finally, the premise contains an inherent promise. “Mom seduces daughter,” makes a promise that mother and daughter are going to fuck. “Teen girl flirts with big sister,” promises that at some point the older girl will give in and take her younger sibling to bed. “Niece has sex with her mom’s twin sister,” promises the readers that she will realize that the desire for her aunt is a misplaced lust for her mother and that they will consummate this taboo relationship, possibly with the aunt joining in to make it a threesome. Your set-up can be as short as a paragraph or as long as a few pages, provided each of these elements is included.

The middle is generally the meatiest part of a story. This is a good place for you to tell us more about the character in terms of background, attitudes, problems, goals, or whatever is important to this story as far as motivation goes. If our premise is mom seduces teen daughter, there should be more to it than just her needing sex. What is there in her past or in her mind that allows her to cross that line and commit a forbidden act? Does she have pleasant memories of sex with girls from when she was a teen? Has she always been secretly aroused by incest fantasies? Does a friend of hers confess to fucking her own son and plant the idea in her head? Did her daughter do something to change Mom’s view of her from an innocent girl to a sexually appealing woman?

This is also where you need to build tension. Notice that I used the word ‘need’! If Mom wants to fuck, daughter wants to fuck, so then they fuck… that’s all well and good, but you’re skipping the literary foreplay. Perhaps Mom makes a move, then pulls back. Or maybe she tries something, and her daughter rejects her (for the moment). Perhaps the sparks fly, but before they can get very far they are interrupted. Without building some tension here in the middle, the climax will nearly always be less satisfying.

Then comes the big finish. This is where the promise of the premise gets paid off. Mom fucks daughter. Big sister goes down on her younger sibling. Niece works her hand into Mom’s cunt while Aunty licks her ass. This is where all porn stories end up – generally, no real surprises for the reader. They know what’s going to happen as soon as they pick up on your promise, but they want to see how the characters get there. If you’ve done a good job of building tension, by the time they get to the expected end they’re so excited that, even though they knew full well what was coming, they’re uncontrollably worked up and masturbating like crazy as the final sex scene plays out in all its graphic glory! Once you deliver on the promise and have drained everyone’s fluids, that’s your signal to end the story, and end it quickly. By then, your reader is a puddle of post-orgasmic fluids at this point, so put a clever bow on your mini-masterpiece in the form of a few poignant lines and walk away.

So there you go – all you ever need to know about story structure. That wasn’t so difficult, was it? Set-up, development, pay-off. If you can think in these terms, your stories will be better than half the stuff out there by default – I promise.

Now that we’ve gotten that out of the way, your place or mine…?

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Rachael’s Slippery Tip #4: Create an Outline

To do an outline or not is a point of contention among amateur writers. To me, this is a silly argument because everyone who writes a story does an outline – even if they don’t realize it. My view is that even if you don’t think about your story and create some kind of formal outline but just start writing your story, this simply makes your first rough draft your outline – a very, very detailed outline.

Creating an outline for a porn story is super easy (at least it is if you do it like I do). It starts when you have that moment of insight – an idea for a dirty story that you just have to write. Don’t run straight to the computer – let the story live in your head for a little while. Play some of the scenes out in your mind like you’re watching a movie. Edit the scenes until they flow. Get to know your characters by watching them interact in your imagination. Jot down any traits, plot twists, or lines of dialogue that get you excited.

When you reach the point where you have to get the story out of your head and down on paper, so to speak, gather any notes you’ve made and do your outline. At the very least, all you need to do is write a brief sentence or two for each scene in your story. This will allow you to create a basic structure for your story that will keep you on track and insure that you know where you going before you begin your journey. Having an idea for how your story is going to end is as important — if not more so — than knowing where it starts.

Okay, so my idea is to write a story about a single mother who confesses to her daughter that she’s a lesbian — and a sex addict. Here’s my quickie outline:

Sex Addicted Mom (working title)

  1. Mom talks to Daughter, confesses that she’s gay, goes on to admit that she’s a sex addict, and her therapist told her she should open up about it.
  2. Daughter thinks about Mom’s confession, gets horny and masturbates to fantasy of her, even though she’s always thought of herself as straight.
  3. Daughter offers support; Mom asks her to get rid of all her sex toys.
  4. Daughter secretly keeps toys; uses them to get herself off to even more graphic mom/daughter fantasies.
  5. Mom tells Daughter she hasn’t had an orgasm in two days and it’s making her crazy; Daughter gets turned on thinking about it.
  6. Daughter now plays with toys regularly; accepts that she’s sexually attracted to Mom and makes plans to seduce her.
  7. Daughter offers foot massage; Mom accepts and talks about her sex problems; Daughter makes her move; Mom gives in and they kiss passionately, then do oral on each other.
  8. Mom and Daughter go to bedroom and fuck every which way.
  9. Final twist – Daughter finds out that Mom never went to a therapist at all; she was playing a game of incestuous seduction the whole time.

There, that doesn’t look too hard, now does it? These are just the bare bones, and provide enough of a framework to get you going. You can jump into the writing process with a good idea of where the story is going and how you’re going to get there. Like I said, this is the minimum. If you wanted to add a little more detail about some of the “beats” in the scene, along with some more information about character emotions, motivations, or actions, you can do that as you go.

This is what my expanded outline for this story might look like:

Mom’s Addiction

SET-UP

Scene 1: Distressed Mom sits Daughter down for awkward conversation – her therapist suggested she be open with those closest to her and admit two things: first, that she’s gay, second, that she’s suffering from a serious case of sex addiction. She admits that she’s a chronic masturbator and watches lesbian porn almost every night. Daughter is shocked, embarrassed, and a bit angry, though she really doesn’t know why.

Scene 2: Later that night, Daughter lies in bed, unable to stop thinking about her mother’s admission. Begins thinking about her mother’s sexuality, is shocked to find herself getting turned on. She ends up fantasizing about her mother masturbating to porn and fingers herself until she comes.

DEVELOPMENT

Scene 3: Next day, Daughter apologizes to Mom for not being supportive. She asks if there is anything she can do to help. Mom talks more about her sex addiction, then reluctantly asks Daughter to throw away some things for her since she bring herself to do so. Daughter agrees, and Mom turns over a large collection of sex toys.

Scene 4: That night, Daughter goes through the box of toys, finding herself growing more and more aroused. Finally, unable to resist, she gets herself off with a vibrator while sucking a dildo to sample the taste of Mom’s cunt. Afterwards, she feels guilty and disgusted with herself.

Scene 5: Mom is upset, Daughter encourages her to talk. Mom hasn’t had an orgasm in two days and it’s driving her crazy, she’s dying for sex and willing to do anything or anyone. Daughter tries to give advice, but the lust she feels for her mother makes it difficult.

Scene 6: Daughter gives into her urges and plays with Mom’s toys again. Accepts that she is sexually attracted to her mother, and decides to take advantage of Mom’s sex addiction to seduce her.

CLIMAX

Scene 7: Mom is really stressed, Daughter offers foot massage to relax her. Mom talks about how hard it is not to masturbate and how she misses her toys. Conversation and massage become more intimate until Daughter makes her move and kisses her mother. Mom resists, but only briefly, then she gives in, returning the kiss. They undress, then take turns going down on each other.

Scene 8: In Mom’s bedroom, they undress and explore lesbian lovemaking for the rest of the day and most of the night. Mom tells Daughter that she’d be able to give up masturbation and porn for good if they could fuck like that a few times each week. Daughter happily agrees.

Scene 9: Plot twist – Daughter somehow discovers that her mom never went to a therapist, and made the whole thing up. It turns out that Daughter wasn’t the one who seduced Mom, but the other way around!

Again, not all that much work, but now I have a very good idea of what’s going to happen in each scene, what the purpose of the scene is (both on its own, and as part of the big picture), and a sense of how these characters transition from mother and daughter to lovers. If something doesn’t work, I’ll most likely be able to spot it at this stage, where it will be much easier to fix than after I’ve written 3,000 words and realize there’s a problem and have to start over.

A big complaint by anti-outliners is that if they plan things out they lose the creative spontaneity of discovering the story as they write it. This is crapola! There’s a great deal of creativity that goes into making a good outline, which is just as exciting as writing. Also, there’s no rule that says you have to adhere strictly to the outline. If you’re in the middle of a scene and a great idea pops into your head, you’re free to pursue it. Filling in the details of an outlined scene is where the action really is, and there’s nothing in an outline that impinges on the thrill of creating a story.

There’s a lot more to say on this topic, but this is enough for our purposes. Think about your story, make an outline, write your story. These steps are critical to completing the creative phase of conjuring your erotic tale while minimizing frustration and maximizing fun.

If you still don’t want to make an outline, try doing one while naked and imagining me leaning over your shoulder helping you along as I rub my stiff nipples against your bare back. If that doesn’t work, then you’re a lost cause!

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Rachael’s Slippery Tip #5: Keep Your Tense Consistent

This seemingly simple little rule trips up a lot of writers (including me sometimes). Your story will most likely either be told in past tense or present tense – “She fingered her pussy” vs. “She fingers her pussy.” A problem I often see is that the writer unintentionally shifts between the two tenses. There are certain cases where different tenses can be deployed, but almost all of the time you need to stick to one or the other. Where I see this shift happen most often is when the story goes from general narration to the action of a sex scene. This is a natural tendency, so watch for it when proofreading your own work.

Past tense is the most common and most ‘invisible’ tense. To keep things easy for yourself in the beginning, this should be your default tense to write in. You’ll most likely find that you don’t really have to think much about it since this is how most of us naturally tell stories to our family and friends. You’ll say “So, I went to the flower shop and bought a dozen roses, and the girl behind the counter flashed her boobs at me,” more often than, “So, I go to the flower shop and buy a dozen roses, and the girl behind the counter flashes her boobs at me.”

Present tense is useful is when we want to give more immediacy to a story (especially when it’s being told from a first-person point of view). “I open the door and see my naked mom shove a zucchini up her snatch” instead of “She opened the door and saw her mom shove a zucchini up her snatch.” Both work fine, but using present tense has the benefit of being able to put the reader right in the moment, experiencing events along with the characters. Whereas with past tense, the narrator is recounting events that already occurred.

The key is to consciously pick a tense before you start writing, and stick to it. When I decide to write a story in present tense I often find myself slipping into past. Once I’m done writing a story in the past tense, I’ll often find myself slipping into it when I’m writing my next story in present tense. It’s a common problem, but one that’s easily fixed if you remind yourself to be aware of it when you’re proofreading your story.

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Rachael’s Slippery Tip #6: Use Dialogue Effectively

Dialogue is when the people in your story talk. It’s one of the most dynamic and engaging ways to tell your story, but it’s often underused in porn. Dialogue can be very effective for revealing character, for filling in background, for moving the plot forward, and for rescuing your story from being a series of big blocks of dense text on the page. It’s a very handy storytelling tool. The difficult part is making it sound natural.

Accomplishing this is more of an art than a science. Paradoxically, the quickest way to make your characters sound NOT normal is to try to mimic the way people actually talk. Real people are all over the place and if you wrote down what they said word for word they would sound like blithering idiots. Story dialogue is a stylized version of speech that rarely exists in the real world, but feels like it does.

One of the most common problems I see is failing to use contractions. We almost always use I’ll, you’re, and they’d rather than I will, you are, and they would. There are certain idiomatic phrases where it sounds awkward to use contractions, but otherwise it comes across as formal and stilted. This is why robots and aliens don’t often use contractions – it makes them sound weirdly different when they talk.

It’s sometimes good to give certain characters verbal ‘tags’, but be careful not to overdo them. Don’t have Judy start every line with “So,” or “Well.” Use these sparingly and readers will pick up on it. Same goes for accents. Don’t try to faithfully represent a character’s accent phonetically (“I pahked my cah in Havahd Yahd”). This is difficult to read and quickly gets annoying. Again, just a few little hints of an accent here and there will do the trick nicely.

Keep in mind that dialogue is usually a rapid back and forth exchange. People rarely make long speeches when they’re having a conversation with someone. Even if they do, it’s usually a good idea for the other character to inject a comment just to break things up.

Each line should move things forward. If you can remove the line and it doesn’t ‘break’ the forward momentum of the scene, then you probably don’t need it. This is often the case with ‘chit-chat’. Yes, it may be realistic, but for the purposes of a story it must be distilled down to its minimal essence.

Another important aspect of dialogue to consider is the idea of subtext. People are often indirect about what they say: there are the words, and then there’s what’s behind the words.

“Sorry I’m late, babe,” Kate said.

Jill forced a smile. “Not to worry, hon. As a matter of fact, our friends have become quite jealous of all the free time your late nights at work give me.”

Here we see that instead of being angry and lashing out, Jill is saying the opposite of what she feels in a sweet, passive-aggressive way, and she is planting seeds of doubt in her lover’s mind. What’s she doing with all that “free” time? Meeting strangers online for role-play fantasies? Licking her neighbor’s pussy? Hitting the lesbian bars, experimenting with bondage? The best dialogue forces the reader to pay attention in order to interpret what’s really being said.

Beyond the challenge of creating compelling dialogue, there is also the grammatical mechanics of how to present it on the page. There are just a few simple rules, but it’s probably the area that most new writers have the most difficulty with. I’ll cover some of the biggest technical aspects of dialogue in my next installment.

To be continued…

Erotic Treasures Unearthed

  • Posted on June 11, 2017 at 12:40 pm

By JetBoy, Site Archivist

Like a vine in the forest primeval, Juicy Secrets continues to change and grow. We who run the joint are always seeking ways to make this site better, and our latest development has us giddy with glee. Feeling curious yet? Read on, readers…

A few months after the initial unveiling of Juicy Secrets, we made the decision to begin archiving our favorite stories from the Lesbian Lolita site (more commonly known as Leslita), compiling the best of their best. So far, we’ve assembled seventy-six of their works — some of them brief, some lengthy, each a jewel of lesbian fiction.

In the months that followed, we posted several stories that hailed from other sites: three from our erotic comrade Rachael (aka DirtyMindedMom) that originally appeared at her own blog, then an older tale from the Nifty Archive entitled “The End of August.” Not knowing where else to put these, we opted for the Guest Authors page in both cases.

However, we recently gained access to a treasure trove of lesbian fiction that was thought to be lost for good… and this little windfall has prompted us to add a brand new corner to our site, earmarked for stories we borrow from any place other than Leslita. So now there are two different pages to visit in our archive of quality erotic works. It’s even more of Juicy Secrets to love!

Now — about that “pleasure chest” of sexy stories we’ve laid hands on…

When we posted our two-year anniversary blog entry just over a month ago, reader Jean left a comment that favorably compared Juicy Secrets to the long lost Sisters in Love site.

Okay, now it’s time for a little history. Sisters in Love was founded by a Portuguese lesbian named Jan, who had long entertained sexual fantasies for a sister, despite being an only child. In what was no doubt an attempt to deal with these secret longings, she set up Sisters in Love and began posting her own stories there, as well as those of others, almost all of them based on — yep, you guessed it — the theme of lesbian love between sisters.

The site developed a modestly-sized but extremely devoted following, and built up an impressive library of stories — including fiction from both Cheryl and myself.

Then one day, fans of the site were shocked and saddened to find the entirety of Sisters in Love removed, nothing remaining but a letter from Jan announcing that she’d found religion, seen the error of her ways and repented, entreating the Blessed Virgin for forgiveness. And that, dear friends, was that.

Now we return to the comment from our reader Jean that I mentioned above, fondly remembering SiL.

Cheryl and I both replied with wistful comments of our own, mourning the loss of so many fine stories when Jan pulled her vanishing act. Then Jean claimed to have a backup of the site — a revelation that damn near knocked your humble servant out of his chair.

The next day, Jean sent that backup file our way.

I’ve been working my way through the delights of Sisters in Love for a few weeks, picking out the gems that gleam brightest. You’ll be seeing these in the months to come, posted in a steady stream on our shiny new Other Sites page… as well as a story written by Cheryl that she thought was gone for good!

2017 is turning out to be a lousy year for a lot of reasons, but it’s been nothing short of fantastic for Juicy Secrets — and the unearthing of the SiL library may be our biggest and best score to date. We hope you good people are thrilled to pieces — or at least poised to get your collective rocks off!

Finally, our most heartfelt thanks are offered to Jean for backing up the site in the first place — and for selflessly sharing its contents with us. We raise a glass of noble vintage in your direction, dear friend.

In the Beginning…

  • Posted on May 16, 2017 at 3:44 pm

By Cheryl Taggert

Recently, Juicy Secrets received an email asking for advice on how to begin a story. While many new authors have no problems at all with starting a story, some do. After some emailed discussions between my site partners and me, we decided to post the information in my reply as a blog entry to continue our series of posts regarding the craft of writing. The following is the result of this endeavor.

Often fledgling authors come up with great ideas for a story, or even a book. Major aspects of the plot materialize and the thought occurs that these concepts should be put together for others to read and enjoy. The potential author sits down at the keyboard, enthused by the idea of creating a story. He or she stares at the blank screen. And stares. And stares. The idea is a good one, but where should the story begin? They’ve always heard “begin at the beginning,” but what exactly IS the beginning?

Sadly, for some the beginning of their story idea is also the ending of it. The story remains unwritten; the computer screen remains blank. I can understand the intimidation of the blank screen. Anyone who has set out to attempt to write anything has heard how important the beginning is. It must grab the reader’s attention immediately without seeming to try too hard to do so.

Published writers will disagree on which one of the “big three” — character, plot, or conflict — is the most important element in a story, so there is no set answer. For me, the most important is character. Who these people are that populate the story, especially the protagonist (the main character), is essential to a story’s opening. The plot and situation, or conflict, can come later — not TOO much later, but I feel if a reader cares about or is at least intrigued by the characters, he or she will continue to read. The opening line is important, which makes the start of a story so crucial.

For example, in addition to erotica, I love mystery stories. When I was in high school, I started reading Lawrence Sanders. In his novel The Tenth Commandment, he begins with this sentence: “I was an only child, so I became an only man.” Think about what this says about the first person narrator, whose name was Joshua Bigg. We’re told in the book’s second sentence that the character’s name is one of life’s jokes, since Joshua Bigg is very short — five-feet-three and three-eighths inches. However, this irony is clearly not for comic effect in the story. That first line says it all. It was an opening I’ve never forgotten (clearly), and I also never forgot the lesson I learned from it as a writer: Beginnings are the most important part of any story.

The truth is that no story actually begins “at the beginning.” In reality the lives of the characters you are creating have already been going on for a while. It is simply a case of thinking of a basic scenario that at least one of your characters finds herself in. (From this point I will be addressing how to write for our website, so nearly all of the characters would be girls or women.) It is also important that we know who this is, and that does not mean her name. But just having this character sitting on a sofa drinking a glass of wine is all well and good, but something does have to happen to her in order to keep us interested. So while I say character is the most important aspect in the opening, we must have plot, or a situation in which the character finds herself.

Many of the details of that situation are dependent on where the story the writer has envisioned will be going. Here are a few questions someone should consider when starting a story:

  1. Who is my protagonist (the main character)? What kind of person is she? Overbearing? Curious? A divorcee? A widow? Shy? Outgoing?
  2. What is her life situation? (How old is she? If she is a child, how much does she know about sex? Where is she? At home? School? Outside? Inside? What is occupying her mind when we meet her? Those kinds of things.)
  3. How much time will be spent developing the characters before actual sex takes place? (This can be tricky. Too little, and the reader can feel as though the characters aren’t important. Too much, and the reader can get bored before the fun even starts.)
  4. Who will my protagonist have sex with first? A friend? A relative? An adult? A playmate? Herself?
  5. How will I set up a situation in which my main character succeeds in having sex with this other person? Or if she is masturbating, how will I make sure she has enough private time to complete the act? If she is having sex for the first time with someone, she will still need privacy. How I provide that is up to me and will dictate the setting.
  6. Are there any problems that must be considered prior to the first sex scene?

These are just a few questions that a writer should consider. Most of these can be answered as you write, but some basics must be in place to set up the scenario the character finds herself in.

Take my current story (at the time of this writing), “Island of Joys,” as an example. When I began, I knew the following:

It would be a period piece, in this case the mid-1800s. I knew this would limit some of the things I included in my story. Battery-powered toys, for example, would be an anachronism, or out of place for that time period. Next, I decided that there would be four main characters in the story, two adult women and their two daughters. I wanted the women to be about two years apart in age, with the second main adult character, Sharon, slightly older and running from an abusive man. The primary protagonist would be recently widowed and taking her daughter to Australia. The children would be a mirror of their mothers regarding age differences: the younger woman’s daughter would be about two years younger than the older woman’s daughter. I would open with the four on a boat they had caught a ride to Australia on, having left from San Francisco, California, several days prior to the beginning of the story. There would be a storm that would sink the ship and cause the women and their daughters to be separated from the boat and the remaining crew. I also knew that the seaman who was rowing their lifeboat would attack someone the first night out after the storm had sunk the boat and be killed in the ensuing fight. I knew the sex between characters would take care of itself, which is what I think would happen regardless of the gender and situation the shipwrecked people found themselves in.

Those were the things I KNEW when I began writing the story. Since I knew the ship would sink in a storm, the best place to start the story was the storm itself. That is why I said that the situation the characters will face determines a number of aspects regarding the beginning of the story. If you go back and look at that opening chapter, you will see I begin with the captain warning one of the women about the storm. The rest sort of wrote itself after that because I knew where I wanted the story and situation to be by the end of that first chapter.

This brings up the point that a writer should ALWAYS have the target situation in mind when writing. Otherwise, an author can write him- or herself into a corner VERY easily. So… the story doesn’t start “at the beginning.” It starts in the middle of everything. I fill in the gaps of information with narrative later, such as how Sharon learned about survival. I will admit that this was a later addition, after JetBoy read the first few chapters and mentioned how unlikely it seemed that women in that time period weren’t totally paralyzed with fear when faced with surviving on a desert island. I thought about his comment and realized he was 100% right. This was not in the days of women in the military. This was the mid-19th century, when women, like children, were seen and not heard, as well as constantly ordered about by men. Thus, I used Sharon’s situation — running from an abusive husband — to help explain why she’s so prepared for this frightening task. So having a reader or two goes a LOOOONNNNGGG way to being a successful writer. All professional authors have them in addition to their agents. (Thank you, JetBoy!)

Therefore, because I knew where I wanted the situation to end up, I knew what had to be told to the reader in that first chapter. Because I knew that a special situation had to be in the story — a ship wrecked by a storm — I knew where I had to begin my story. After the opening line, it was easy as far as what would happen. When a mother accompanied by her young daughter is on a ship in the middle of an ocean and is warned about an approaching storm, she finds her daughter before doing anything else. That’s only natural. Then she sets about following the captain’s suggestion in this case to “tie everything down.” At that point, it’s all about getting my characters onto that desert island, where the idea of sex would eventually make itself known, which is already chronicled in chapter two.

So now our fledgling author might be thinking, ‘Okay, I have this girl age eleven who has discovered that she can find a lot of pleasure by rubbing her pussy.’ This brings up the question, how and where did she learn? Did a friend tell her about a sexy website (a very common storyline)? Was she washing herself in the shower or tub and had a ‘hey, that feels good… I wonder what would happen if I did it more and harder’ moment? Let’s say our author chooses the second one, the shower. She could start with the girl either getting into the shower OR she could have her lying in bed that night thinking about it and wondering about doing more… maybe she had a friend who had hinted at such feelings and she is curious about them. Who knows? The fact is how our new writer develops the plot is totally up to her or him.  One can begin ANYWHERE in the story, so long as it helps set up the first scenario the main character finds herself in. Here is a beginning to such a story:

Beth lay in bed, staring up at the ceiling and wondering about the feelings she had experienced in the shower that night. The sensations seemed to come out of nowhere. She remembered how her best friend, Leanne, had smiled in an odd way when mentioning how her nightly shower was her favorite time of the day. Beth had wondered if Leanne had been talking about some sort of sex thing because of that smile. It had been… suggestive.

Suddenly, Beth had an understanding of a term she had only thought she understood. A suggestive smile. She had heard that term before but had never realized it had something to do with sex. She’d just thought it involved a secret. Any secret. Here she was a normal, healthy eleven-year-old girl who got good grades in her sixth grade classes, and she had never realized the meaning of that term until now… when she had put two and two together and arrived at an adult understanding of something that had escaped her before. Did this mean she was finally growing up?

She had accidentally aimed the handheld shower massage unit at her pussy. She’d been thinking of Bobby Tyler and what it might feel like to kiss him when ZAM! the shower’s powerful sprat had hit her square in the pussy and sent shivers running through her. She’d pulled the handheld unit away suddenly, as if it had stung her. Then she had realized that if that was what it meant to be stinging her, then let the stinging commence! The accidental squirting of her pussy with the shower massage had started feelings she’d never experienced. Oh, things had felt “nice” before when certain pressures had taken place, but this was different the same way that riding a plastic horse on a carousel was different from riding a roller coaster.

She had aimed the jets of water once again at her center and had felt the most incredible things. Tingles had run through her like an electric current. She had shivered involuntarily although the water was very warm, almost hot in fact, the way she liked it. And the sensations she felt down below her waist were, well, both amazing and scary.

Slightly frightened and wondering if she were hurting herself without meaning to, she had put the shower head back in place and finished showering, intending to forget about what had happened.

But now she could do nothing BUT think about it.

And wonder how she could repeat those feelings now that she was no longer in the shower but lying here in her bed.

Now, look what we have here. We know the main character, Beth, is eleven years old and in sixth grade. Her best friend, Leanne, is probably slightly ahead of Beth in the sexual discovery department, something sure to come into play later, which foreshadows events that serve as an additional hook for the reader, who is now anxious to read about the characters’ future experiences. Beth is a good student, and she is discovering things she had never realized existed before. She has discovered that there’s something more to her pussy than something to pee from and bring babies into the world. She is obviously rather sheltered from the facts of life as far as her parents and explaining her body are concerned. She is on the edge of discovering some wonderful things about her body. And now the nocturnal situation our heroine finds herself in can lead to a full-on exploration of her pussy, an act of further discovery that could or could not end with her first orgasm. Frankly, if I were to continue writing this, I would have her not reach a climax this soon. I would want her to talk to her friend Leanne about this discovery first. However, the exploration could be a LOT of fun to write as well as to read.

I’m already thinking of where to take this — a sure sign that the story will hold my interest. At this point I would have to decide if I wanted the conversation between the girls to take place in this chapter or the next. If I’m writing only a short story instead of a longer work with chapters, I would get to that talk faster and end up with Leanne and Beth discovering more than just how to reach an orgasm when alone, but in all honesty doing that would be rushing events a bit too much, so this scenario would best be served by a multiple-chapter story at the very least, or an erotic novel should I get interested enough in these characters and their situation.

As far as creating a beginning to a story goes, all I’ve done is put a girl in a situation in which she is thinking about sex. There’s no set way to begin a story. The beginning all depends on where the author wishes to take the story in the long run. Our fledgling author could just place a character in a situation and tell us about it through her actions, dialogue, and thoughts… Once upon a time there was a little girl who thought about sex. It’s as easy as that.

If you are a fledgling author, give it a try. The feelings of accomplishment are well worth the effort. Just ask a few of our Guest Authors featured at Juicy Secrets. They’ll tell you. And who knows? Your new story could even be as hot as a Carolina reaper pepper.

Happy 2nd Birthday AND 1000th Post, Juicy Secrets!

  • Posted on May 4, 2017 at 2:18 pm

Please join us, dear readers, in celebrating the second anniversary of the founding of our site. Have a piece of birthday cake, read the messages below from Naughty Mommy, JetBoy, and Cheryl Taggert, and also congratulate yourself on being a valuable part of something truly wonderful and unique.

Cheryl’s message:

Oh, my! What a fast two years it has been. Once again, the three of us who started this little endeavor have decided to post a blog entry to celebrate the anniversary of the Juicy Secrets site going LIVE for our readers, this one the site’s second birthday. However, this time, there’s more to celebrate!

As of today, we posted the 1,000th entry at the JS site! That is a LOT of stories, chapters, and submissions by Anonymous for your enjoyment. That number also indicates how busy we all have been here. This site takes a lot of work, and I believe that hard work shows in the quality of material we feature here. If the average number of words per entry is 2,500 words, that means there are around 2.5 MILLION words dedicated to erotic stories for your reading pleasure!

We’ve not done this on our own, either. Our accomplishment is shared by twenty-one other authors whose work now appears on the Guest Authors page, as well as the forty-six authors represented on the Best of Leslita tab of the Juicy Secrets website. A few of those Leslita authors are also contributors listed on the Guest Authors page, of course, but I’m sure you get the idea. There are MANY excellent authors represented here. And those numbers are as of today’s date as I write this, April 26, 2017. These numbers could increase by the posting date for this blog entry.

That is no small feat in itself. There are many here who would attest that there are many stories we turn down for various reasons. Some are well-written but stray too far from the lesbian themes we choose to feature. Others could be well-written if the authors chose to complete a re-write and re-submit the work, and still others are just not up to the level of quality we seek here for our erotic literature.

As many of you are painfully aware, many authors found on the Net can be, well, rather lacking in talent. Some stories out there are so bad they can make readers laugh. Others are so brief that about the only thing that happens is a character reaches an orgasm — probably about the same time the piece’s author did. I call these stories “wankers,” an apt name if you ask me.

Fortunately, the work of the vast majority of authors who submit work to us does not fall into that last category. In fact, I don’t believe we have received a “wanker” since the early months of our website’s existence. I believe people recognize the quality of the stories we feature here and choose not to submit something unless they feel it is worth our time to read. Sometimes it isn’t quite there, but lately the writing we have received is extremely good. For one thing, we keep getting submissions from many of the authors whose work we have already posted. And the first submissions we receive now are considerably better than the first submissions we were getting early in the life of Juicy Secrets.

I recently emailed my partners here and “complained” that I no longer had enough time to read every story and chapter we post here. I will read the first chapter — or at least most of it — when it is submitted for consideration; however, I am woefully behind on reading subsequent chapters. That is because there is just so much that is coming in now that we are posting, and subsequent chapters roll in regularly!

As of this writing, there are 23 drafts either being worked on by the site owners to prepare for publication on the website or simply waiting in the wings for a publication date. Furthermore, there are 7,348 comments from readers and the three owners. By the time this blog posts, those comments will be above 7,400, and the draft numbers will probably remain about the same, meaning we will have posted as many as we receive between now and then.

I am so happy my partners contacted me and asked if I wanted to go in with them on this venture. It is a labor of love for all three of us, and I am honored to be a part of it.

So, here’s to you, faithful readers! Thank you for an amazing two years. We hope you are around for many more!

JetBoy’s message:

When Naughty Mommy first reached out to me in early 2015, asking if I thought it would be a good idea to start her own story website featuring lesbian erotica, my response was immediate: Yes, you totally should, and can I be a part of it? Cheryl responded in much the same way, and we were off to the races. The starter’s pistol is fired; we’re off and running!

At the time, we had no idea how our little venture would fare. Would we be able to get the site established without getting shut down by the censors and moral arbiters of the internet? Could we negotiate the many technical ins and outs of setting up and running a website in the first place, considering that among our eager trio, only Naughty Mommy had any real computer know-how? Were there enough potential readers out there to give a damn about what we were striving to create?

Then, once Juicy Secrets was up and functioning, we were confronted by another crucial question: would there be other writers out there who would be interested in offering us quality stories of their own… or authors we loved who might be coaxed out of retirement to write once more?

Two years and a thousand site entries later, you can see for yourself how those questions were answered… and how deliriously happy we are with the results.

My partners and I have amassed a veritable library of sapphic fiction — great stories old and new. We’ve archived many quality works from the past (and will continue to unearth more). We’ve encouraged writers who had laid down their pens to take them up again. Best of all, our humble site has attracted an impressive roster of newer authors… and 2017 has seen what once was a mere trickle of submitted stories build into a steady stream, one that sometimes feels like a flash flood. Honestly, we’re busier with Juicy Secrets than ever!

It’s a lot of work, maintaining a site like this so that it consistently meets the high standards we set from Day One… but it’s a task done out of love for lesbian erotica, pride taken in making our humble corner of the internet the very best it can be, but mostly our desire to please you — to quicken your heartbeat, get your juices flowing and, most importantly, bring you orgasms of wall-shaking intensity.

All honor to my beautiful and talented partners, Naughty Mommy and Cheryl; to the dozens of fine authors whose works grace our site; and to you, our readers. Your ideas, your suggestions, your energy, your affection and your wonderful selves are the fuel that keeps Juicy Secrets chugging along. May the Great Kahuna rain blessings upon you all.

Naughty Mommy’s message:

Well, another year has flown by — but as people of a certain age like to say, we’re not getting older, we’re getting better! I certainly hope that’s true of Juicy Secrets.

Perhaps we should look back one year and see how much things have changed since our site’s first birthday. As of May 4, 2016, we had published a total of 132 different stories from 47 separate authors. Pretty impressive, right? Well, I’m proud to say that we now have over 200 different sexy stories here — 201, to be exact — from 71 authors! That’s a huge and expanding library of kinky lesbian erotica for you to come here and enjoy reading.

What’s been most exciting to me is the growth in our roster of Guest Authors. One year ago we still had only seven of them, to go along with the three of us, your site owners. That meant you were seeing new stories and chapters from ten different writers; very good, to be sure, but nowhere near as good as it could be. Because in the past twelve months, we have welcomed another fourteen excellent writers of boundary-pushing erotica who are now publishing their stories on our site. And, of course, as Cheryl mentioned, these are not just your average hacks, churning out predictable, substandard porn. We are very careful to accept only the highest quality of writing.

I think that’s quite evident if you take a look at some of the truly remarkable multi-chapter entries we have going on right now — like “A Young Desert Rose” by Sunnybunny, “My Family, Friends, and Sex” by Purple Les, “How My Niece Juli Came To Be My Vixen” from Openmindedwoman, “A Girl Named Charlie” by Amanda Lynn, “Bo and Me” by Unfastened Belts, and the latest masterpiece from Girl Lover, “Ultimate Surrender.” All of these are stories you can really sink your teeth into, with intriguing plots, compelling characters, realistic situations, and, oh yes, extremely hot sex. Great, great stuff.

So, are people actually reading all this great great stuff? Indeed, I’m pleased to say that they are, and in increasing numbers too. As the chart below shows (from Google Analytics), we’ve been seeing a strong and steady growth of visitors to the site. You are not alone in enjoying this very special niche-brand of lesbian erotica — there are plenty of us out there!

What will the next year bring? It’s hard to say for sure, but my guess is that Juicy Secrets will publish a whole lot of terrific stories and chapters from even more wonderful authors, and that our beloved readers will enjoy many more satisfying orgasms. As we like to say, keep coming and coming back!

❤ ❤ ❤   Hugs and kisses from Naughty Mommy, JetBoy, and Cheryl   ❤ ❤ ❤

So When Do We Get to the Sex?

  • Posted on February 16, 2017 at 9:12 am

By Cheryl Taggert 

Sex and sex and more sex. That’s what this site is all about, right?

Not so fast. There may be more to Juicy Secrets than just giving our readers something to help them jack or jill off. We aren’t your typical erotica website. Sure, orgasms are the goal, just as getting runners to home plate is the goal in baseball when a team is at bat, and preventing that when a team is in the field. I’m not much on sports, but I do at least know that much. But this metaphor of relating the reading of erotic fiction to reach an orgasm through a particular type of entertainment to a game in sports is more accurate than one would believe at first blush.

Again, I know very little about sports — only what I was forced to learn in school — but one thing I do know is that some teams are better at achieving those goals than others. It’s the team that is better at playing the game that usually wins. And that’s because it isn’t the goal that matters, but how the goal is achieved. In other words, it’s the way each individual player approaches the game that is most important. And the players who have the better approach to the game are the ones who are the most successful, even within the framework of a single team. That is why I was often the last or close to the last person chosen when we picked teams for softball at my school. You see, I throw like a girl, but that’s fine with me. I am a girl.

But while I throw like a girl, I write like a pro. So does Naughty Mommy. And JetBoy does as well. So do all the other writers published here. Because, you see, while the orgasm is the goal, the quality of the story is the game. And that is what’s most important to the owners of this site.

We have published quite a few stories as well as chapters of longer works here in the past twenty-one months. Over 900 stories and chapters have been posted to the site, and that doesn’t include the nearly twenty blog entries, stories, and chapters that are waiting to be posted. And there are many more to come beyond those. We have seen a tremendous increase in stories sent our way that meet our standards, and I can attest to the high bar we set for writers of our type of fiction. It takes all three of the site’s owners to agree to publish a story for that to happen. We each have veto power, so only the best gets shown to our readers.

Lately, we have tried to push the envelope a bit to bring you the best erotic fiction we can find. We have posted our first story that includes some male sexual activity beyond what would be necessary for the plot. The author requested that we keep this part in if we wished to publish it, and after reading the entire story, we all agreed. The quality of the story was just too good to pass up, especially since the final lesbian scene that is the ultimate payoff positively sizzles.

We search for good stories. We search for writers as anal about good writing as we are. But often the stories with the best writing take a while to develop enough to introduce the sex. If a reader encounters a story and cares nothing about the characters in the story, he or she will stop reading it soon. Writers of quality erotica take the time to allow us to get to know the characters before rushing them into a sex scene, or they take the time to develop a situation fully. Writers of bad erotica just want to get off and stop writing.

We are fully aware that this can be frustrating for readers at times. I vividly recall getting the next chapter of Naughty Mommy’s wonderful tale, Serendipityreading it, and finding there was very little sex in the chapter, if any at all. I found myself wanting to read about the sexual encounter I knew was on the horizon but had not been written yet. I had to wait, but in the end, her pacing of that fine story made everything better. And by the time Serendipity reached its ending, I was too involved with the characters and their situations to ever abandon reading it.

I took a big chance with my own I Was the Daughter of a Porn Star when I decided I wanted more to my saga than just one sexual encounter after another. I wanted tension. I wanted my characters to have problems. I wanted verisimilitude, which is the appearance of reality in a fictional situation. I discussed my plan with my partners through emails before starting that voyage, and they agreed with me. In Part Two of the novel, I thrust my characters into situations that involved blackmail, kidnapping, sexual slavery, and a daring escape, among others. Two characters I’d taken time to develop died. A seven-year-old girl lived without her mother until she was twelve. I was taking a big chance, but I think those who stuck with this story have enjoyed it more than if I had continued with the “sexual encounter of the week” format I had been following. Part Three has its own situations and conflicts, and more problems lurk on the horizon, despite the fact that everything seems perfect for our heroine at present. That’s how real life is.

JetBoy’s story, “Loving Lisa,” which so far has eight chapters for your reading pleasure, took quite a while getting to the sex. The opening chapter has none between the narrator and the girl she’s so attracted to. Yes, the young girl, Lisa, is seen masturbating, but that’s it. There are small scenes of sexual play between the narrator and Lisa, with each being hotter than the last, but the payoff doesn’t really come until Chapter 6. This story is an adaptation of a story by Louisa May, something JetBoy excels at, and as good as Louisa May’s writing was, I am convinced that JetBoy’s adaptation is better. Of one thing I am certain about JetBoy. I am not heterosexual, but I imagine his wife is a happy woman when it comes to sex because this man knows how to build to the payoff.

I have visited many story sites like ours, and often I am less than thrilled. If I open a story and two people are engaged in sex in the opening paragraph, I skim forward to about the halfway point to check out where the story is headed. Then 9 times out of 10, I find another story, unless I am very familiar with that author and understand why it is written the way it is. To me, the only time that would be the way to open a story is if it leads to a flashback or some other seduction, or if the story itself depends on the sexual encounter to continue. It’s as simple as that because the sex itself isn’t what really gets me going. It’s the lead up. The seduction. The situation. Is that because I’m a woman? I hope not. I like to think men enjoy quality erotica as well.

We will soon be publishing a story that just came to us that has absolutely no sex until chapter three, and that is only a brief encounter. Likewise, No One’s wonderful tale, “Remnants,” merely hints at sex until halfway through the third part of a three-part story, yet we felt honored to publish it for our readers. Why? Because it was well-written, a story that allowed us to get to know the two main characters, one of whom doesn’t show up until chapter two. When the sex finally arrived for us, it was a pay-off worth waiting for. It takes talent to do what No One and the other author I mention above have done. They understand the nuances of the game, so they play it extremely well.

And that’s the name of the game in erotica. What each of us tries to do is include enough sex to make it erotic and provide satisfaction to our readers, while including enough story, character, and conflict to keep readers coming back to find out how everything turns out. It’s called pacing. 

The title of this blog article is a question that has been asked probably countless times. We do not apologize for making you wait. The sex will come, but only after you get to know who the characters are beyond their names. I’m certain the vast majority of our readers appreciate that. Look at it this way. Ask any woman if she would prefer a partner who takes his or her time getting her to her first orgasm of their encounter, or one that dives in straight for the clit to see if he or she can beat that twenty-five second record for bringing the woman off, and see what answer you get. I doubt the answer would surprise you unless you are totally inexperienced with sex beyond masturbation. We here at Juicy Secrets are the same way as every woman on the planet. We enjoy the foreplay as much as the orgasm, if not more.

So come along for the ride. The payoff is always better when the ride is longer.

When It Goes Wrong

  • Posted on December 27, 2016 at 1:10 pm

By Naughty Mommy

I know many of us have enjoyed reading (or re-reading) Passing Cloud’s lovely erotic tale of girlhood experimentation, “School Memories.” It’s a terrific piece, one that I’m happy we’ve included here in the archives at Juicy Secrets. Of course, the author never quite finished the story back in 2014, leaving us to wonder what might have happened next.

In a comment at the end of the last posted chapter, Drod says: “Perhaps our three hosts here could make a collaborative effort, and continue the series?” That’s an interesting idea, though I doubt we’ll actually do it, given that neither Cheryl nor myself are very much into collaborating with other authors (JetBoy, on the other hand, has a long and successful history of doing so). Plus, I have good news — we heard from the author recently, and we’ll be publishing a new chapter in a few days!

Still, Drod’s proposal made me stop and think: If I did choose to extend “School Memories,” where might I want to take it? As I spent some time pondering the question, I realized that I’m actually not very pleased with the direction the story is going. I was much more fond of the character ‘Sis’ when she was an innocent but eager naif, rather than a budding dominatrix.

Of course, this is not my creation, it’s Passing Cloud’s. The original author chose to have the plot go that way, the actors evolving as they were. Many of our readers probably like it just as it is. But if I had been the one to write the story, I think I likely would have decided to go back and make some significant revisions before publishing — probably throwing out everything from about the middle of Chapter 3, where Sis says she wants to be “in control,” and starting over from that point.

And as I thought about that, I remembered the struggles I had in writing my own story, “Secrets.” I’d been working on the piece off and on for quite a long time, for four or five years or more, when I realized it was going wrong. I had taken the narrative in a direction that wasn’t pleasing to me. I’d made a mistake, and I knew I needed to correct it.

Anyone who’s ever done any serious writing has probably experienced this. It’s not a good feeling — to know that you have to toss out so much of what you’ve written, discarding the product of many hours’ work. Still, it must be done.

This is somewhat unorthodox, but I’m going to let you have a look at some of the material I rejected. Below is a long passage, about 3000 words, that I wrote down in a fever pitch of excitement. It’s fairly hot, I think, and it might be good in another story, with other characters, but it’s not right, at least in my opinion, for this story, for “Secrets.” You may feel otherwise.

If you’d like to compare what follows with what I eventually published, go to this point in Chapter 9. As you can see, they’re very different. Anyway, here is the section I eliminated:

Around 5:30, I served our dinner on a picnic table on the back patio. We had a nice time together, enjoying the food, laughing and joking. When they’d finished their burgers and fries, I gave them each a big dish of ice cream, and they really enjoyed that. They went inside then to play in Kerie’s room while I cleaned everything up.

I was in my bedroom putting away some of the clothes I’d washed earlier in the day when the two girls came into the room. It was a few minutes before 7:00.

“Mommy, we have a question,” Kerie said.

“Uh-huh.” Tossing the last two pairs of socks in the drawer, I closed it and asked, “What is it?”

Kerie sat on my bed. “Um, it’s about what we talked about earlier. About our game and about not talking to people and stuff. You know?”

I sat down on the bed next to my daughter and patted a space for Melissa to sit down too. “Go on,” I said.

“Well, since I already told Melissa about it, it’s okay if we can talk about it, right? Long as we don’t tell anyone else?”

“Yes,” I smiled. “If you two want to talk about it, that’s fine. Just be sure you keep it only between yourselves though.”

“Yeah,” said Kerie, “and, um, since I already told Melissa about it, and since you know that she already knows about our game, would it be okay if I showed her how we do it?”

I frowned. “What do you mean, showed her?”

“I want to let her see. I wanna show her how I do it with you.”

I was completely taken aback. I didn’t know what to say.

“Please, Mommy?” Kerie begged. “She won’t tell anyone. She promised.”

I felt in a daze. The little game I’d started playing with my daughter just a few weeks earlier was now threatening to become an open sexual display — for the benefit of a 9-year-old girl!

“Please, Mommy?” She had her hands on my legs.

I was wearing cutoff jeans that left most of my thighs bare. My thin short-sleeve sweatshirt did nothing to conceal my braless nipples, which were now standing erect. Kerie’s risqué proposal may have caught me by surprise, but it was also exciting me tremendously.

I pretended to want to refuse, however. “No, honey, really I don’t think we should do anything like that. Our game is just for us. It’s private.”

My daughter slid a hand underneath my sweatshirt, reaching up to fondle one of my nipples. She could see the evidence of my arousal, and she knew what it meant.

I took her hand in mine and pulled it away. “Stop that, Kerie, it’s not polite.”

But I didn’t want her to stop. I wanted her to continue, and to do even more. I loved having her touch me that way. I even liked having her do it in front of another little girl — maybe especially in front of another little girl.

I looked at Melissa. Her big blue eyes were sparkling, her pretty face shining with interest and curiosity.

And it seemed that my daughter could tell, whether from the tentative tone of my voice or perhaps from my body language, that I did not really mean it when I told her to stop.

She began to pull my sweatshirt up. “I wanna show Melissa how your nipples get big.”

This time I did not take her hand away. I allowed her to lift up my top, revealing my breasts. I raised my arms and let Kerie pull the sweatshirt all the way off. I sat quietly on the bed between the two little girls, and I let my daughter touch me.

“See?” she said to Melissa. “Look how big they get.”

She fingered my nipples, using both hands. Already erect, they grew even longer and harder.

“Do your mom’s nipples get like that?” Kerie asked.

“Sometimes,” answered Melissa, “like when she gets out of the shower.”

“But you’ve never touched ‘em, right?”

“Uh-uh. Not like that.”

Kerie was playing with my nipples, gently tugging at them and twisting them between her fingers. It was making me very wet.

“Do you want to touch them?” she asked Melissa.

“Okay.”

Now I really knew I should stop them. It just wasn’t right for a grown woman, an adult, to engage in sexual activities with children. I should never allow this 9-year-old girl to touch my nipples. But I did.

“Mmm,” I moaned as I felt Melissa’s little hands on my breasts.

“See,” Kerie said, “she likes it.”

Melissa not only fingered my nipples, but extended her hands to caress the sensitive skin around them. Her hands were too small to cover my breasts completely, but she held them and gently squeezed them.

“They’re really nice.” This was the first thing she’d said to me since they came into my room. “I like your tits a lot, Ms. Gregory.”

“Thank you, honey.” My voice was thick with arousal.

My daughter began to undo the buttons and the zipper on my shorts. I didn’t stop her. She tugged the shorts down my legs. Now I was wearing only a pair of blue cotton panties. In the center of the panties was a large dark spot, where my dripping pussy had made them wet.

“Look,” Kerie pointed. “When my mom gets excited, she gets wet like that. Your mom probably does too, when she, um, masturbates. Can you see how wet my mom’s undies are?”

“Yeah,” breathed Melissa, bending her head down between my legs to stare at me.

Kerie was wearing a long yellow t-shirt over a pair of flowered leggings. She suddenly pulled the t-shirt over her head and off.

Grinning, my daughter pointed at her flat chest. “I don’t have any boobies at all yet.”

Then she looked at Melissa. “But you do. Show my mom your little boobies.”

“Okay.”

The little girl lifted up her tank top, letting me see her small breast bumps. She looked down at them. “I hope they get bigger. My mom’s aren’t very big, though.”

She looked at my tits again. “I like yours, Ms. Gregory.” And she put her hands on them once more.

I inhaled sharply.

My pussy was tingling, my erect nipples throbbing with desire. The combination of being naked, or nearly naked, in front of the two girls, then seeing this lovely child’s tiny little titties, and having her hands on my breasts, was driving me wild.

“Take your shirt off,” Kerie told Melissa.

After the girl did, my daughter asked her, “Do you have any hair yet, down there?”

Without waiting for an answer, Kerie pulled her leggings down below her hips and tugged her panties down too, letting us see her hairless crotch. “I don’t.”

Melissa smiled as she looked at her friend’s smooth slit. Then she got off the bed and opened her shorts, letting them fall to the floor. She pulled her panties down too, to her knees, and proudly displayed her pussy to us. “I started getting some a little while ago.”

Whatever she had was still so sparse that from where I was sitting, which was only two feet away, I could barely see it. It seemed more like light brown peach fuzz than actual pubic hair.

“Cool.” Kerie stepped closer to admire Melissa’s evidence of maturity. Then, as she sat down on the floor to finish pulling off her leggings and panties, she said, “Take off your undies too.”

When they were both naked, they climbed up on the bed beside me.

“Mommy, move over there and put your head on the pillow.”

I did as my daughter instructed. Then she knelt between my legs and started tugging on my panties. I lifted my hips to allow her to remove them.

Holding the blue cotton panties in her hands, Kerie commented, “Look how wet they are inside.” Both she and Melissa touched the dark spot, feeling the sticky wetness on their fingers.

Kerie pushed my thighs apart, then laid on top of me. I put my hands on her little bottom. Her skin felt warm.

“Come over close so you can watch us better,” she said to Melissa.

And then, with a barely pubescent 9-year-old girl sitting naked at my side, another girl, my not yet pubescent 8-year-old daughter, began moving her naked body against mine, showing the other girl the ‘game’ we played, showing her how she could fuck her mommy and make her come.

It took me longer than usual to climax. I was nervous about having Melissa there with us, although at the same time I was also very excited by it. But instead of being able to concentrate solely on the sensations that Kerie’s body was bringing me as she thrust her little pubis against mine, I kept glancing over at Melissa to see how she was reacting.

She was wide-eyed, as might be expected, but she also showed some definite signs of arousal. One hand was at her tiny breasts, gently squeezing them, and the other was between her legs. I wasn’t sure if she was old enough yet to masturbate, but she seemed to have the right idea.

The girl’s eyes kept going from my tits, to my face, to my tits, to my legs and Kerie’s bottom as we moved together, and then back to my tits. She seemed to love seeing the way my breasts would jiggle each time my daughter pushed against me.

The distraction of having another girl there watching us delayed my orgasm, but it certainly didn’t prevent it.

Kerie kept moving on me, up and down, faster and faster. But she could sense, perhaps, that I needed a little extra stimulation, so she put her little hands on my tits and began squeezing my erect nipples, while at the same time, she said, “Mommy, I’m fucking you. I’m fucking you with my pussy, Mommy. Do you like it when I fuck you, Mommy?”

Hearing that really made Melissa’s eyes go wide.

When Kerie grabbed my tits that way, it surprised me, and her vulgar language stunned me for a moment, but my shock changed almost immediately to excitement. Yes, I loved it when she fucked me! And I loved having her hands on me! Yes, I wanted her to make me come! Make me come right in front of Melissa!!

I started to say those things to her, but before I could utter a word, a huge orgasm overtook me. It seemed to come from nowhere and everywhere at once. Without warning, my whole body was contracting in, then exploding out, then doing the same again. It was the most intense orgasm I had ever felt—

—and someone was crying out, screaming. I had a vague idea that it might be me, but everything all around was dark or foggy, no, it was red and steamy, no, white hot, burning, ah, now it was black and smooth and oh so sexy.

Minutes passed, I don’t know how many, until I came back to my senses and found myself laying on my back in my bed, naked and sweating. My legs were flung wide apart and my pussy was dripping wet. There were two little girls with me, both nude, Melissa on one side, Kerie on the other. They were looking at me and smiling.

As I opened my eyes and glanced around, taking in the scene, my daughter leaned over to give me a quick kiss on the lips. “Was that a nice one, Mommy?”

“It was — oh my god, I hope I didn’t scare you, Melissa.” I put my hand on the girl’s knee.

“Uh-uh,” she said. “It was awesome.”

“Yes, it was,” I grinned. “Awesome is a good word for it. Wow.”

I looked up at Kerie. “It was definitely a nice one, sweetheart. A big one.”

“It’s called an orgasm,” said Kerie to Melissa.

“I know that,” answered the girl, slightly peeved.

“There’s another way I can do it with her too,” Kerie went on, “make her come, I mean. Do you want me to do that now, Mommy?”

“Do what, honey?” I shook my head a little, trying to clear the post-orgasmic haze.

“Make you come with my hand, with my fingers inside you.”

“Oh, I don’t know, I —”

But my daughter did not wait for my consent. Before I knew it, she was down between my legs, spreading my pussy lips apart.

I meant to object. I meant to stop her from doing this in front of Melissa, but when she started rubbing my clit as she slowly slid a finger into my vagina, it felt so incredibly good that I could not find the will to protest.

Taking my breasts in my hands and gently massaging them, I closed my eyes to focus on the intoxicating physical sensations as my body responded shamelessly to Kerie’s touch. I felt laden with moisture and warmed all through, like a sponge dipped in a hot bath. I knew my pussy was dripping wet. It made it easy for her to put another finger inside me and begin fucking me harder.

I raised my knees, opening my thighs as wide as I could. I lifted my pelvis from the bed, offering my cunt to my daughter. As I pinched my nipples between my fingers, I felt a climax beginning to build.

“That’s right, baby, fuck Mommy,” I heard myself say. “Fuck’s Mommy’s pussy with your finger, and make me come.”

Kerie grinned at Melissa. “See how much she likes it?”

“Wow.” The other little girl was kneeling next to my daughter between my legs. They were both staring at my wet cunt.

“You want to watch, Melissa?” I asked. “You want to watch me come while Kerie fucks me with her fingers?”

She nodded eagerly.

Kerie put two fingers inside me and pressed them in deep as she continued rubbing my clit with her other hand.

I closed my eyes and squeezed my nipples. “Oh god it feels so good. I’m gonna come on your hand, baby.” I was very close to another climax.

Then I made myself open my eyes again. I wanted to see this, to fully understand and accept exactly what was happening.

My daughter, my 8-year-old little girl, had her fingers in my vagina and was moving them in and out, intent on giving me an orgasm — while her best friend, a cute little 9-year-old girl, was watching intently.

I was having sex, lesbian sex, with a minor, and not just any minor, but my own child. It was incest, and I loved it.

“God, fuck me, Kerie,” I urged, “fuck me hard and make me come!”

And with those words, I did begin to come.

I think I must have squirted, which is very unusual for me. I know that when I finished I was much wetter between my legs than I normally am, and Kerie’s hand was literally dripping with my fluids.

“Oh my god,” exclaimed Melissa.

“You wanna try it?” Kerie asked the girl.

“Really? Can I?”

“Sure. Here, I’ll show you how.”

Melissa bent down, very close to my pussy.

I was still short of breath after my orgasm, but I tried to object. “No, Kerie, we shouldn’t. Not without…”

I was about to say, ‘not without her mother’s permission’, until then I realized how absurd that would sound. What mother would allow a 9 year-old girl to put her finger in a woman’s pussy?!

So, I just laid back, spread my thighs wider apart, and let it happen.

“Put one hand up here.” Kerie was showing her friend how to stimulate my clit. “And rub like this.”

I’d barely come down from one climax and now they were trying to give me another.

“You have to make sure she’s open all the way, so push her apart like this.” My daughter was separating my labia. “Then rub your finger in here, so it gets really wet and slippery, and then just slide it inside. See where that hole is? That’s her vagina.”

“This is so awesome,” I heard Melissa say.

Then I felt a finger pressing inside me. I groaned. “Push it in further,” I whispered.

Melissa was just a tiny girl, barely four feet tall. Even though she was six months older than my daughter, she was shorter than Kerie, so her little fingers weren’t very long at all. But it still felt so nice to have her reaching up inside me, probing my cunt, exploring my hot wet sex.

“Oh god yes goddamn yes fuck me, fuck my cunt,” I whispered.

The child began moving her finger in and out.

“That’s right,” instructed Kerie, “and you can put another finger inside now.”

I wondered what Rose, Melissa’s mother would think, if she could see us now. Of course, right at this moment Rose Harper was hopefully being fucked by my own sister, so she might have other things on her mind. God, I love having sex, I thought. Especially sex with little girls, like these two.

Melissa was eagerly fucking me with one hand while her other hand massaged my clit, but it wasn’t quite enough.

“Kiss me,” I demanded.

“What?” asked Kerie.

“Melissa, kiss me down there,” I said. “Kiss my pussy.”

“Okay.”

The child put her mouth down to my sex and began kissing me. That was all I needed. I came again, loudly and wetly.

When I recovered, I looked down between my legs and saw that the two girls were taking turns rubbing their hands inside my slit to get them wet with my juices, and then they were tasting me, licking and sucking their fingers.

“Do you like it? It tastes good, right?” asked Kerie.

“Mm-hmm,” Melissa answered, nodding as she sucked on her fingers.

It was the hottest, naughtiest, sexiest night of my life.

“What else do you want to do?” I heard Kerie say.

“Can I touch her tits again?” asked Melissa.

“Sure.”

My daughter had apparently taken ownership of my body, and was offering it as a sexual playground to her little friend. Of course, I didn’t mind, I didn’t mind at all.

They moved up by my chest, one girl on either side of me.

“I like your tits, Ms. Gregory,” Melissa said.

“Call me Shelly,” I muttered, still in a post-climactic daze.

That made them giggle.

“She likes it when you touch ‘em,” Kerie said. Her hands were on my breast. “Rub the nipple and make it hard.”

Melissa’s hands were now on my other breast.

“You can suck on them too,” I told them.

Along with ownership of my body, I’d apparently lost possession of my senses as well. I was saying things I never would have allowed myself to say in a normal state of mind.

“Really, Mommy?” asked my daughter.

“Yes, suck my nipples. Both of you.”

And they did. The girls each latched onto a nipple and began sucking like babies. I closed my eyes, relishing all the wonderful sensations as I slid a hand between my legs, massaging my clit.

We went on this way for a while, until Kerie said to Melissa, with a grin, “You want to try fucking her?”

“With my fingers again?”

“No, with your whole body, like I did before.”

“Oh! Really? Can I?”

“Of course you can. Mommy loves it!”

 

That’s about as far as I got before deciding I wasn’t happy with all this. Sure, it’s arousing as hell, to me anyway, but it doesn’t seem to fit within the story I was intending to write.

The segment posted above gives Kerie a completely different personality, much too knowing and too bossy. It also gives Melissa undue prominence, making her a major character when what I really wanted at the time was to shift the emphasis back to Valerie and her family. So, I decided this had to go. (I didn’t entirely delete it, however, or you wouldn’t be able to see it now; instead, I created a duplicate copy of the story and made my revisions there, keeping this just in case I ever changed my mind and wanted to go back to it.)

This is how the process of writing works, in my experience. It’s not often I will throw out as much as I did in this case, but it’s certainly not unusual for me to delete several paragraphs or even a couple of pages and start over again if I think I’ve gone wrong. Of course, I hate to admit, even to myself, that I’ve wasted time writing something I won’t use, but I’m almost always much happier with the results when I’m done.

The Method to My Madness, Part Three

  • Posted on November 29, 2016 at 4:11 pm

The Art of Making It Believable

By Cheryl Taggert 

Originally, a fair amount of what follows was an addendum to the end of Part Two of I Was the Daughter of a Porn Star. I have done some editing, additions, and deletions to create this blog post, so it is not exactly what appeared at the end of Chapter 60. I go more into why I did what I did, the concern with pacing, as well as addressing the remainder of the novel, which is Part Three.

I must say I am proud of this phase of my erotic novel. Normally, an author just lets the story stand for itself, but because I communicate with my readers through comments on the website, making me feel much closer to you all, I felt more was needed than just saying adios to a couple of characters who had played such a big part in this story.

I’ve known for a long time that Carlo and Gwen would die in the rescue, as well as Pablo. The other minor characters who chased Cindy and the twins through the brush died because the story required it, and I know that nobody felt the loss of them at all since they were what I would call “bit players” in the story. Besides, they were part of the “bad guys” and those losses are not mourned the way the death of a “good guy” is.

There are a number of reasons I chose to kill off Carlo and Gwen. First, there is this thing called making a story believable. Having our heroes unscathed at the end of this hastily concocted escape scene just would not pass what I call the believability test.  While much of what we write here is beyond that scope because we want to write the erotic scenes, not convince our readers that nearly every woman in the world craves sex with their daughters, etc., when I tackled the idea of writing a section that dedicated itself to a suspense angle, I knew I needed to prevent my reader from saying to him- or herself, “Oh, come on, now. Really?” at the end. Read any suspense novel, and more often than not someone the reader likes suffers by the end of the book, often suffering death.

That was the case here. I knew from the outset that one of the three women would have to die to create what is known as verisimilitude, which is the appearance of being real. That is also the reason Cindy is not the one to shoot Pablo, which would have been a sort of completion of a circle in the story. The idea of Cindy being well-trained in shooting a gun, despite not having a gun in her hand in at least five years, and making the shot is not believable. The idea of luck entering the story at this point would strain credulity as well. She was lucky enough to escape with her life.

As I say, I knew one of the women would have to not make it. If it were Cindy, the entire rescue would be considered a failure, regardless of having saved the twins as a sort of token happy ending, overall. If it were Kayleigh, we would lose a character we’ve known since chapter one, a heroine of the story overall. More than that, the loss of her mother would have to have a devastating effect on Cheryl, which I was not planning to create in the story.

This left Gwen. She was peripheral for the most part. She was fighting to save Cindy despite knowing she was playing with fire and risking her life. Her life had even been threatened to leave it alone, but she did it anyway. Unlike the other two women, she was not necessary to the rest of the novel. The decision, then, became an easy one, despite the loss of a character I liked, as well as everyone else reading this.

I once read that Agatha Christie wanted to kill off Hercule Poirot for years, but she didn’t do it for marketing reasons. This would be like James Patterson killing off Alex Cross. (If you don’t know this writer and character, think Ian Fleming killing off James Bond… same thing.) Had I written a series that included Gwen and killed her off in book ten or something, I would expect a tremendous backlash. Stephen King’s main character in Misery suffered the ultimate backlash after killing a favorite character. Gwen, however, only appears in the dozen or so chapters of this book where she takes part, so while I knew there would be backlash, I felt safe in saying good-bye to her. The good news is that I am considering bringing her back to life to be the heroine in my mainstream book, but with a different character name.

The fact that some of you have expressed your sadness over the loss of Gwen only means I did what I set out to do. That you care about my characters is the greatest compliment any writer can receive. It means they are more than words on a page. They have become real to you.

I set out to make Part Two an erotic thriller that would become a page-turner more for the suspense than for the sex, and I believe I have succeeded. I worried that the vast majority of you would stop reading this book because there were chapters totally devoid of erotic scenes. I am sure some did move on to other stories, and that’s fine. I cannot force people to read my work, and this is an erotica site, after all. That many of you not only kept reading, but also urged me to ‘hurry up’ with the next chapter is music to my ears. I am humbled by your admiration of my work.

It wasn’t easy to write the suspense portion of the story. I was always concerned with pacing, not wanting to venture too far into the suspense without having, for want of a better term, sexual relief (as opposed to comic relief). Pacing is an important aspect of any story. Readers would tire of a story in which nothing seems to ever really happen. Likewise, they would get exhausted reading a book that was always like waiting for the bad guy to jump out of the closet. There needs to be balance. Fortunately, the sex in an erotic novel is a natural moment to allow the reader to just enjoy the story.

That will be different in my mainstream novel, of course. No publisher would buy a book in which the main characters — a mother and daughter — were engaged in an incestuous lesbian affair, regardless how much he or she enjoyed that aspect on a personal level. But pacing is an important thing to remember when writing, regardless of the subject matter. Pacing is having the right amount of one aspect in the story before moving to another. As a writer, you want just enough, but not too much.

This is how cliff-hangers are created. Just as you are getting interested in one character’s exploits, a chapter ends and you are somewhere else with another character and situation, and that other character and his or her situation that you were so interested in must wait until later to be resolved. This keeps the reader reading, hoping to return to that other situation soon. When you finally do return, you have grown enormously interested in that other character and situation. It’s urgent as a writer to make these choices correctly.

Part Three of this novel will involve the character Cheryl as a young adult, ages 18 to 24. She is of legal age now, and her life continues to be filled with sex and love, which are the reasons for the story in the first place. She will attend a local university for some very personal reasons, and meet new and exciting friends — many of them children. She will also meet the love of her life (I wonder what name I will give her??) and deal with the intricacies of being in a committed relationship, much of them autobiographical. I will go ahead and tell you that I will write about how I first met Lisa. Some of our old friends will return, like Deanna, who didn’t have much to do once the rescue of Cindy started being planned, as well as Deanna’s sister Elizabeth, who is newly married and sneaks to have sex with Deanna. I am also bringing back Nikki, the daughter of Rick and Tera, the production assistants who asked Cheryl and Deanna to seduce their daughter. We haven’t seen her since she was five. She would be fourteen now that Cheryl is eighteen. She might even have a little sister to share with the girls… and my readers. ;)

So I hope you come along for the ride that is Part Three of my longest erotic novel. Funny thing is that when I started this, I thought it might go twenty chapters, twenty-two at most. As of this writing, I have completed chapter 64, with at least another dozen in the plans.

So sit back, grab something to sit on if you are a girl or something to come into if you are a guy, and enjoy what I hope will be the hottest chapters I’ve written to date.


Previous articles in this series:

The Method to My Madness  (June 12, 2015)

More of My Madness  (February 16, 2016)

Sexy Gems from Our Little Lesbian Library

  • Posted on November 18, 2016 at 3:09 pm

By JetBoy

Starting as of immediately,Image result for sexy librarian my lovely partners and I are introducing a new feature to Juicy Secrets in our continual quest for excellence: a Featured Story of the Week, to be posted on the site’s front page every Friday. With each selection, we’ll be highlighting a story from our library of lesbian fiction that is, in our humble opinion, worthy of your notice.

Our objective here is to shine the spotlight on older, lesser known works, many of which simply never got much attention. Before opening Juicy Secrets to the public, we loaded the site with most of our older material. Since none of these got the splashy front-page announcement that newly posted stories receive, we suspect that some of them simply slipped beneath the radar of our readers.

This is the inevitable way of things at erotic fiction sites, actually — the lion’s share of attention will always (and should always) go to the newest posts. With the Featured Story of the Week, our objective is to turn you on, literally and figuratively, to some oldies but goodies you may have missed in your travels.

If you’re one of our regular crowd, you shouldn’t have to be told how much we appreciate it when you leave comments with these or any of our stories, and how wonderful your words and thoughts make us feel… so I won’t even address that topic!

We do hope that the Featured Story of the Week will bring you considerable reading joy — as well as the occasional knee-trembler of an orgasm.

Many thanks to all of you who are part of our little community.

No comment?

  • Posted on October 14, 2016 at 2:30 pm

By JetBoy

I’d like to bring up a subject that is very near and dear to my partners and me: your comments and feedback, and how crucially important it is to us — and this site.

We three have addressed this topic many times over in our various blog entries, comments, statements of purpose and story introductions — but always as an aside. Now, the time feels right to explain why the gift of your words and thoughts means so very much to us.

First, a few words about what goes into making Juicy Secrets what it is.

Without even asking, I can speak for Naughty Mommy, Cheryl and myself in saying that the running of this site is a genuine labor of love. Read our first-year anniversary blog post to get an inkling of the satisfaction and outright joy we’ve derived from planning Juicy Secrets, bringing it to life and watching it grow.

But when you click onto our link and navigate around the site, exploring its nooks and crannies, what you’re seeing is the result of work. A lot of work. Adding new posts and stories (which often includes considerable reformatting from the original source), hunting for thrilling images to accompany them, making necessary changes to the site pages to present and catalogue these posts, penning notes and comments for each other’s writing, doing the back-and-forth with our guest authors (even the ones that don’t make the cut), trawling through Leslita’s vast repository of lesbian fiction for stories to add to our archive, etc.

Not to mention writing our own stories, which requires a heaping helping of time in itself.

Finally, there’s the hours my partners and I spend hashing ideas, problems, planning and logistics between us. You might find this difficult to believe, but we exchange emails about what’s happening with the site almost every single day, holidays included.

Needless to say, we don’t make a cent doing this. Actually, it’s not even possible to make a living writing the kind of fiction that we do. I’d estimate that ninety-eight percent of our content consists of stories that no publisher (actual or virtual) would touch with a ten-foot pole — and the lion’s share of them wouldn’t be accepted by any of the big erotica sites, either.

Which brings us to the million-dollar question: why do we do this? Well, there’s the pride my cohorts and I feel at having created Juicy Secrets, and the security of having a safe space for our work. But there’s also the enormous pleasure of having that work noticed and acknowledged, particularly in the words of praise and the thoughtful comments that some of you are kind enough to leave after you read.

It’s hard to describe just how good it feels, that giddy surge of delight that we experience when a reader compliments our writing. It’s a friendly pat on the back, an assuring smile, a hug of encouragement that tells us our work has value — and all the time, effort and occasional frustration that went into it was worthwhile. The warm regard of an audience is a better high than any drug, no question.

On the other hand, it’s a major downer to pay a visit to a recently posted story, one that you put your heart and soul into, and find no more than a single comment, or nothing at all. I’ve known authors of erotic stories — good stories — who’ve simply abandoned their craft in defeat, convinced that barely anyone gives a damn about their work.

Don’t misunderstand, dear readers — your Boy Author is not throwing a woe-unto-us pity party here. Cheryl, Naughty Mommy and I derive a great deal of satisfaction from doing what we do. But your comments add so much to that satisfaction that I’m willing to put aside my pride — indeed, even my dignity! — to plead with you good people: spare a thought for us when you especially enjoy reading a Juicy Secrets story, and leave a comment.

It should be added here that, much as we crave your praise, it’s even more important that you leave comments for our guest authors. Doing so will increase the likelihood that they’ll continue to write — a winning situation for both Juicy Secrets and its readers!

One final point: we are not — emphatically not — asking anyone to offer praise for our work if we haven’t earned it. As the great comedian Flip Wilson once said, “If you didn’t intend to applaud, don’t applaud. Keep your damn hands to yourself!” On the other hand, if the story moved your soul, got you feeling warm and tingly all over, or spurred you into a “happy ending” of your own… why not take sixty seconds out of your life to tell us so? Thirty seconds, even. Hell, you can type “Great story!” in less than ten. And it honestly does mean the world to us.

Thanks for indulging my shameless pandering, and for being a part of this site’s extended family. (You must be, if you’ve read this far.) May the road always rise with you.

Love, JetBoy